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Today, we will look at a seed deck from TeamOhana used to raise $4M.
This is a good opening slide with a clear one-liner that gives investors an idea of what to expect from this deck.
This is a great team slide that very clearly shows the critical elements of their background that prove that they can return capital to investors and that they are qualified to operate this company.
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This type of narrative deck works very well for products that are hard to explain. This is a good perspective framer to show the problem and gap in the market.
To me, this isn’t clear enough and there had to be a better way to explain the gap in the market. The first slide was clear, but this one isn’t as straightforward. I don’t really understand what hole they are seeing in the market.
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This slide should have come before the last one; it provides the context needed to understand the last slide.
This is a great slide to show how companies are struggling without the product/service that this startup is offering. I would have recommended they do it with three problems instead of 4. Psychologically the rule of threes is very strong and it makes sense to cut a problem to remember the three are remembered.
This deck is getting very repetitive, with 4/5 similar slides that are all about the same things. They aren’t moving quickly enough or providing enough new information on each slide.
This, again, is something that should have come earlier. It’s a great perspective framer that is being buried deep in this deck when it could have been more powerful early on.
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